If you were here
by XxXcrystalXcontagiousXxX May 11, 2006
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If you were here i would say all the words that i had left unspoken.The day you said good bye i said i hope you choke on your words and with a sigh i thought to myself you will come back but looking back i wish i had tried.But if you were i would let the words just spill out as if i was singing a song i would scream out why did you go i should have said no wont you come back would you even care but if you were here i would dare just one last time to tell you what i feel inside but theres no chance your with her now so i just take one last glance and as i sit and cry i know i have lost my chance. |
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16 years ago
by Sweet lig
Nice expressing ur emotions here and i'd love the metaphor its kinda unique and very worded feelings.. its not ur best but it was good thoughts.. 5/5
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16 years ago
by Crystal Gaze
It's very emotionally deep, and an extreamly good read. But if you seperated your paragraph into stanza's and punctuation it would make for a better poem/ read.
You have a talent,so help it.
Elaine -
16 years ago
This is very good. i know the feeling. im going through this now... i love ur work, keep it up.. 5/5
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16 years ago
by HaileyHelen
I love this poem 2 death it is on my favs!hehe
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16 years ago
by Birgit
This is powerfull, but I agree with the others, maybe put some stanza's in it.. =]
4/5
