Untitled (you decide and tell me)

by tom   May 22, 2006


I gave you my heart
its locked in the vault
i whish i could do the same
with my rotten thoughts

i hold my fist high
i scream out your name
i fall to my knees
i cant take this pain

this is my fault
i poisioned your mind
i tried to take advantage
but your not so blind

now im in this cage
in for my own good
locked away my rage
im so missunderstood

i swear on my life
no matter how much i hurt
i wont take this knife
and bleed my body dry

this ring i wear with pride
my face i try to hide
this poem dosent make sence
i wrote it as i cried

please tell me what you think, it would be a great help and i jsut want to know waht people think of poems so yeh, please leave a comment or a vote, and i repay favours!!!!!!

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  • 17 years ago

    by A New Beginning

    It makes sense. Very good job.

    -Steph
    Ps- If you want to talk to me you can. I won't force you to do anything. If you don't want to talk dont, if you want/need to, be my guest. I don't care how long it is, I'll read eevrything you have to say, probably twice so I make sure I get it all right,lol. But it's all up to what you want to do. I was just letting you know I'm here to help if that need be.

  • 17 years ago

    by N3v3r N3w Lov3 Sucks

    You can call this Poisened Mind? Well Holla back at me. I would like to get to know u.If its okay wit u. Im 15 about to b 16 in june 11! Well Bye

  • 17 years ago

    by amanda

    I love that poem its not often that guys can write good poems that was great. i would of liked to help with the name but i can find anything good enough to put for the title. sorry..

  • 17 years ago

    by SaveMe?

    Dose make sense!
    and you are amazing at writing poetry!
    you are amazing in every way
    i love you
    and
    *wipes away tears*
    i love you more than anything
    ever
    love you
    xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

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