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by ♥DiFFeReNT   May 23, 2006


Running away
To the place I'd never be
Welcome
With open arms.

Running towards
A place where
No one cared.

Running away from
Everyone.

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I kinda wrote this on the spur of the moment, so if you guys have anything you think I could improve on, please tell me. Thank ya!

-DiFFeReNT

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  • 17 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Yeah, maybe if you wanted to, you could continue it and make it longer. longer doesn't necessarily = better, but it might help add to the clarity of this poem. i like the "running away, running to, running away" pattern

  • 17 years ago

    by ari

    I think to make it better, you could explain why you're running to a place where you were not welcome. it confuses me. but that's cool about that poem. it;s confusing :)

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    This is quite a unique piece. Short but it conveys alot...that's not an easy task to complete.
    Take care and keep it up~Holly

  • 17 years ago

    by ari

    Call it "Running"! haha, lol, thanks for the compliment! I'm good at describing people. That's how i normally start off my poems.

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