Aww. This was beautiful. Loved how you kept repeating 'It was just like heaven' The way you expressed it, This place sound really beautiful and calming. I wish I could go there -Stops feet- Taha. Awesome poem hun, Loved it. Keep up the awesome work. 5/5

`taleee xx

I liked the idea of the poem...it was written well...but the flow wasnt all there but besides that it was a great poem...
Emma 4/5

Your poem significantly improved following the second stanza. The first two stanzas state explicity what they should be implicity creating for the reader. When you say that the colors are spectacular, I think it would be more poetically effective if you were to actually describe the colors. Words like spectacular don't do justice to the kind of image you want to create for your readers. Good work, and it'll be even better if you shape up the first two stanzas.

Overall, it was a good write. The poem improved as it develops, but the opening did not draw as much attention as it should. I love how you personify the fountains, cherubs, and trees in the third and forth stanzas. If you can do the same to the second stanza and expand on the poem, it will improve the feel of the poem. Good work though.

Nice job, though the flow was a little awkward, the overall poem was very relaxing.

First of all i loved this poem because of the wonderful imagry and descrption. I can picture this beautiful place in my mind... a place i have never seen before, like nothing ive never seen before. Your poem makes me think of what a heart must look like when its in love. definately 5/5 -Jen-

I loved this poem, it was so good, it goes so deep that I can see the pictures in my mind, it makes me want to go there, I also loved how u kept repeating It was just like Heaven, all I can say is wow....5/5 from me, great job.
love always jennifer

Oh. Cute poem. I thought it was very well written. I really liked it. :D

Great Job.

You know its nice to read a happy poem for a change
and one thats actually good!
awesome... v. original
5/5 for sure
much love
*miss murder*

U make it sound so much like heven! luv it!

Isn't it always great when we see something thats just so beautiful, that it takes our breath away?? great job hun 5/5

Another absolutely awesome poem, keep writing such god poems
well done and thanks for commenting on mine
xxxx

One of the best nature poems i've read.

This was so beautiful, the descriptions. The subtle repetition, the metaphors and similies. Just a gorgeous write

Sondos

Such a beautiful poem!
It created such deailed pictures for me!
I love the words you used..they made this poem so gorgeous!

Jen

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Wonderful poem! You really gave great details for this scene. I had no troubled imagining what you wrote. It's weird though, when you say it's just like Heaven. But, I must ask, have you been there?.. haha, I'm sorry.. I like causing conflict :P

Awesome poem :D

Wow, this was fantastic. the images that were created in my head were beautiful, great job xxxx

Brilliant use of imagery I had a vivid picture of this beautiful place you have invented for us. The use of enjambment (running on of one line to the next) gave it a hazzy almost dreamy feel. Only one small critisim, the repeated use of the word 'sun' / 'sunlight' breaks the picture up a little for me.
A great poem
much love
Aaron (remo) xxx

This poem was just... beautiful. i already commented on it once... but you asked me to comment again so =P... it was definately better the second time around :D -Jen-

I can picture everything you wrote..
beautiful.