Comments : In Memory...

  • 15 years ago

    by Aussie

    Very very good. very good rythme. it seem that there's mor. keep writing:)

  • 15 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    This is a beautiful poem, and the message is lovely and sad. Good job! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Natalie

    First I'd like to say I'm really sorry for the loss. A really good poem though. It was a little short, But that doesn't matter. It was really well done. Keep it up =] 5/5

    `Taleee

  • 15 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    The strongest element of this poem, as it attempted neither rhyme nor rhythm, was the repitition in the beginning stanzas. I thought the repitition compounded the emotions in the piece, making it very powerful.

  • 15 years ago

    by Darien

    Aww J.Lau, that is such a sad story, but a beautiful write. Loosing someone close is always hard. Such a heartfelt write. Thanks.

  • 15 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    It's a wonderful non-rhyme poem. Well-written

  • 15 years ago

    by Cayce

    Awww.. That was so sad.. very good though! I hope you're okay. Great job.

  • 15 years ago

    by Robert

    First of all, i'm really sorry for your loss...
    you've done a great job writing this poem, it's very sad, but beautiful & well written. good job..
    rob

  • 15 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow.. that really hit home. I lost my step dad to cancer and now we think my mom might have breast cancer. I'm really sorry about your aunt. But you did a great job on this poem. It was very sad and heartfelt. The second stanza was my favorite. Great job on this. 5/5 Stay strong :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aw wow! This was so sad. I'm so sorry for your loss.

    I thought it was a great poem though. I noticed aswell that with each stanza {except for the last one} you repeated the same word at the start of each line except for the last line. Thought it was good. Keep it up! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    J --
    I think its terrific that you`ve gone out of your way to write a poem for your late aunt. I bet you that, even though she can`t tell you, she loved it. =D I think the flow throughout the poem was great. I also liked the repition of phrases on the first three lines of the first three stanzas. -- it added a nice twist that most people don`t think to include in their work. Great job, 5/5
    Much thanks for your comment on my song. =D

    Samantha Hollywood

  • I really liked this poem!! My aunt just passed a month ago from heart failure, so it reminded me alot of my uncle right now!! 5/5!! The flow was great!!! Great Job 5/5!!

  • 15 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Very sad, a nice simple touching poem

  • 15 years ago

    by Sole

    Great poem. It made me think about those I'd lost, and cheered me a little. Excellently written.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 15 years ago

    by Krissey

    Oh I am so sorry to hear about your Aunt..you wrote a beautiful distribution to her though! May God be with you and your family! Beautiful write!
    R.I.P Helen..I hate reading these poems they make me sad..yet it was nicely written!
    Krissey

  • 14 years ago

    by Shae

    Good poem. Its really sad and shows alot of emotion... Great poems. Keep writing!! 5/5

    ~Shae

  • 14 years ago

    by Jenni

    This is such a touching poem about a loss in the family. you did very well at capturing emotions and the character of the poem. 5/5