I dont have any advice for u i think it is the best it could b. i got a lot from it i thought it was soooo good and it made a good point!!xoxo

Its good because it relates what im feeling right now :)

Very good. just like all your other poems.

Wow this is amazing...i hope this is not a bout you! please look at my poems

This poem is sad but really unique

Wonderful poem, i can't wait to read the rest of yours. Keep it up! :D

Wow! I loved it... it was so good. you really have some talent! Great work!

Tight poem
i thought it was radical
mm kay

That was really sad.... i prefer poems w/o rhyme but that was reall really good. well yah. im not just sayin this so u would return da favor but that would b nice.

Very good poem deadly will u read some of mine tanx xxxx ps i love sad poems

Sad... you're a great writter. :)

3/5

That is very deep, and I hope things get better for you soon.
God Bless
Renee

This is a 5/5 poem. i can relate to this. ive been there before.

This is gud!keep upthe work!im tryna get gud 2 i juz started this so they not that gud

U should value u ur life '-broken-'
there r many good things in life!
Dont end ur life! killing urself isnt the way out!
Value Life!

This is awesome! Keep up the great work. =)

-*La Little Lor Lor*

MAN! your poems are so sad. I've said it before, and I'll say it again, I don't like suicide. But you describe the feelings of that person so well. It's kinda scary! My suggestion is to watch your syllable count. There are some parts in your poem where the lines are longer than others, so it throws the flow off. But other than that, you've got the words to catch and KEEP a reader. That's great!
Charisma*

I really like it, im saving it!

Maybe i should try putting a fake gun to my head to get my moms attention lol Shes so dumb she'll think it's real lol great poem