Omg, First I wanna say I pray to god this isn't true. This was really really good. There was so much emotion in this. And it was really sad. My mouth has dropped, I don't know what to say. This was 10000000% awesome. Really loved it. 5/5
Aww.. that was so sad and very heartfelt. I'm sorry if this is true. You did a great job on describing everything and it was filled with so much emotion. I love the part: "His pupils are whirling around
In his crazy eyes
And his face is a stunning purple "
Great imagery. You did a really good job on this. I hope it's not true. 5/5**
Awww this is such a sad story. I have a friend who wrote one like this, about abusive parents, and that poem went on to do wonders. This one is just as great, and I hope everyone gets a chance to read. Awesome stuff!
Thats sooo sad! I feel like crying.... I can't express how nice you made this poem! It was perfect and really kept my attention... My only suggestion is in a few places you flow gets thrown off because your getting a little to wordy with filler words. But overall your an amazing writter and this was an amazing write! Keep writting or I'll be very upset with nothing from you to read!
I will never understand how some people can live with themselves after they have sunk so low as to abuse sweet children. How can they dare to get drunk off their a** when they know they become horrible people under the influence. I wish I could kill them myself before the harmed such sweet inoccent people. This subject is very dear to me, thank you for writing.
This is all too familiar for me. It brings back memories of my past. My dad used to beat me too... I still don't understand why he ever did. He's in jail now... he doesn't scare me anymore. But if this is actually true... you have to get help. He can't keep doing this to you and your mom. I lived with it for a really long time. Good luck... I'm here if you need to talk.
This sparked a tear... if that is the right word to use.. wow I couldn't even imagine anything like that.. I'm speechless right now. I hope it's not true. I do like the symbolism and the meaning behind the hidding place. Great job