Comments : Fatalistic

  • 13 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Great Job. Some parts kinda related to me. 5/5
    -Vino

  • 13 years ago

    by Pure Silence

    Hunny,

    I hope you know I'm ALWAYS here for you. I love you to bits...

    Poem wise: Stunning the firat two stanzas are just fantastic,

    Too many fatalistic ideas,
    To rip your body apart,
    Show you the pain that I feel in my heart.

    I love the way you chose to describe this, your words , as always, fit in the natural flow of the poem. You are a talent girl m'dear and poetry would be lost with out you.

    I love you forever and always
    Jenn

    Ps: I MISSLES YOU!

  • 13 years ago

    by Avellana

    Talking about raw, this poem shows your innermost and darkest thoughts. The kind that make your back so tense your about to break.

    I'm finally ripping at the seams''-

    I love that line, It's like your fed up of being held together. You want to be out, and free. V. Cool.

    xxx

  • 13 years ago

    by Nee

    Aw hun what an amazing piece of work!
    OMG!! I miss all your stuff and all the ppl in here!
    your poem was so touching and the flow of rhyme was really amazing! I like the rhyme scheme also =)
    keep it up hun
    Luv U!
    NemO x0x0x0x

    P.S how are exams doin with you?? mine will start next week =(

  • 13 years ago

    by Briana

    Amazing. Love it.

  • 13 years ago

    by Solace

    Amazing just like all of your others. I loved how I could relate so easily to every line. I hope you get everything worked out. Take care.

    *> : PainOfOne [blaine]

  • 13 years ago

    by Jamie

    I like the first two stanzas the besttt...this is so good...you've gotten so good!!! lost the rhyme scheme but it was so good it didnt even matter lol this is amazing i really mean that 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Aww wow you written this poem so beautifully, and the ending was even stunning. I loved this, extremely well written and powerful. I really hope everything is well, try to look at the better side of things and keep up your good work! 5/5

    (Thank you for your comment on my poem! xxx)

  • 13 years ago

    by Rich

    This is so increadibly visual and touching. Unbelievable... In it's own way - it's beautiful in it's honesty.