by JAMIE Jun 10, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Why do I have |
Wow i really loved it i know exactly how you fell great poem |
You had some logical word use and constructive stanzas. |
by Sean Allen
My advice is that the rest of the stanza should be more like the first one, specifically the symbolism and descriptive language in the first one. It shouldn't be overly dramatic, but lots of cutting poems lack the specificity of why cutting happens, why the past year was so bad, why things aren't getting better. They should all be things that were thought about at some point, but for some reason cutting poems usually just give the abbreviated version of the story. |
by StefQ
Alot of emotions and alot of sadness in this poem, it doesn't have a flow but i think it doesn't need a flow since it read really quick =) good job 5/5 |
by Sarah Dowlly
I really liked this poem, however when i first read through it i found that it didn't really flow too well, but after re-reading it, I found it easyer to read, maybe it's just me, i'm not sure! But i do think you did a good job, there's alot of emotion! 5/5 |