You write very well!! I can feel your emotions in your poetry.I really liked this poem! -May

"In your happiness and hopeful eyes, I know i don't belong."
capitalize the last 'i' =)
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The reason that I thought this poem was as good as it was was due to the length of each line. It allowed the rhymes to be distanced from each other, and gave a very rhythmic flow. I liked the few metaphors and symbols, like living in his heart, etc.

However, I think this poem lacks details and more poetic devices. In a way, that is part of the poem, because it is written as if it were spoken to someone. However, I think that there is enough room in the poem's intent for more descriptive language and tools.

Your poem does have the rhymes spaced out, which can give the reader a feeling that nothing was forced, as if this migh have come from your whole heart and soul. The lines were long but contained in one line on the page instead of running off.
I know that maybe your heart will never be my home,
[Something I've written about recently too. But though it feels as if the writer has given up hope, the next few lines picks it up again.]

I think you could have gone and used a few poetic words every now and then. Maybe related how you felt to more objects or things in nature or a memory you have. Maybe gave depth to the poem so the reader can feel much more than the sadness and loss of hope and dreaming feeling written on the surface which does wash over your reader.

Aww.. this was sad.. this was pretty good but i felt that it was a bit bland and unoriginal.. the flow worked but i found a few places where it didn't sound quite right.. and you just have a few grammer mistakes and such, but you can always fix those.. :) nice try.. 4/5

Wow your a really talented poet-amazing poem 5/5 keep writing! could really feel the emotion in this poem

I like it a lot, it's really original

"That you see through me and discover my smiling lies."
'discover' is a verb that is inherently in the future, so in order to work with the tense situation in the sentence (parallel construction issue), you are going to want it to be more like 'have discovered', because if they are currently 'see through'-ing, then the discovery has already occurred.
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"And you'll judge me without even approaching to my life."
I feel like using 'to' after 'approaching' is an improper use of the verb 'approach'. Using 'to' is more commonly reserved for the noun form of 'approach'. I'd omit the word 'to' from the sentence.
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I've already commented on this poem once before, but I had different things to suggest this time, and you wanted some questions answered.

First of all, the second stanza doesn't follow the rhyme scheme.

What did I understand?
All of it, it was not difficult to comprehend.

What did it make me feel?
Sort of sad and lonely, though detached from the situation as well. I didn't feel like I was involved (I'm not), but some poems drag the reader into the midst of things, this kept me separate.

What part did you like and why?
I liked the length of the lines and, ironically, the second stanza. I liked the second stanza because it held important and personal details, and it was the one stanza I connected to the most. The length of the lines I enjoyed because it separated the rhymes and made the story more enjoyable.

Wow.. that was really good. There's so much of this that I can relate to. You did a great job on this. The second stanza was my favorite. It was very descriptive and emotional. 5/5

I love how you use such vivid images. It makes me feel like I can almost reach out and touch you, and touch your pain.

Awesome poem. Don't say you don't have talent, because you have plenty.

I really liked this poem, there was so much detail.

I absolutly loved the last part

"I know that maybe your heart will never be my home,
In your happiness and hopeful eyes, I know I don't belong.
Every moment of my life has left me all alone,
Still I wish that just with you it won't be the same sad song"

You are amasingly talented, keep up the great work.

--Steph