That was good. but im alittle confused what happen to her. i was wondering.5/5

Well written, moving. I felt I was there, watching the two of them, feeling.

Despite your footnote, you've captured this moment very well.It is real and emotional, and definitely leaves a lasting impression.

GaryJ

Wow..i love this. it's real, and it's going on in this world. i love how you described the man in detail...it added to the smoking part.