I think that if you're going to write a suicide poem, you should do your best to include lots of personal details concerning the events that led to the suicide, along with a great deal of metaphors and similes (or at least descriptive language). Since suicide poems very easily can become cliche, details are important to help distinguish the great poems from the norm.

Very sad poem hun. Was good though. I just agree with Sean abit. With these kind of poems you need to try and fill in each detail. So when the reader reads it, They can understand exactly why this person chose suicide. I liked it though, You didn't go into it too much, But you could have gone into it a little more. Keep it up. 5/5 =)

`Taleee. xx.

Good write, i've been trying to avoid suicide poems lately since they used to be all i wrote and i'm trying to get away from that but it's a good poem. I agree with the others that you could have put a little more detail, theres never any harm in making a long poem =P lol. good write though =)

Wow, that was really sad! it was great though, I would go just a little more in depth! but it was still good! 5/5

Great flow, very sad ending.

Sad poem indeed but very well done lol and pay no atention to anyone eles theres something to be said for being abel to keep things short and to the point 5/5 on this one too great job

Awww this is sad but cute in a way. i really like it a lot. again i can relate to this. if you need to talk i'm here for you. just message me. 5/5 keep writing!!

Aww.. that is a very sad and deep poem. I hope that you don't really feel this way :) But you did a great job on this. You had some great word usage, like: But now you're leaving me behind,
This is my death certificate you have signed.
Those lines really stood out to me. You did a great job on this! 5/5

Hey thanx again 4 ur comment on my poem, on all the time u commented u were right, so thaks alot cause u u hadnt found them i probly would of not noticed em.
love Mel

Really sad... this poem really almost brought tears to my eyes... well, not really in that way but the feeling of being left alone really showed in your writing! Thanx for the comment and hirs my second r/c for you!

Your rhyming was very well done in this poem. it all flowed exellently, and you chose a rather tricky rhyming style.

the last stanza was the one thats stayed in my mind. very haunting

Ruby

Ok i am not sure, but i think you wanna say "threw" instead of "through" and also i am not sure but i think whatever is one word? i am not too sure tho!
great poem tho!
keep it up!

This is another really good poem... loved it...

well i would like to edit a part...

well you wrote:

"My time on this earth is almost up,
The blood is dripping from this deep cut,"

i was thinnking maybe you could change it to:

"My time on this earth is almost up,
The blood is dripping from the cut,"

i think it would flow better that way... idk... but overall i loved the whole poem and all ur ideas... keep it up always

This is good. Some of the lines were a little forced-sounding, and you should watch your rhyming, but it was a really great poem to show like, emotion.

Even though there are hundreds of suicide poems on this site (of which ive read a dozen) I would say this one sticks out best to me because of the last line
"whatever you do, please remember me"
because I belive that's a driving force behind a lot human actions. The want to be remembered.