It's a good poem, good flow, good rhyme, good poem =). it creats a really good visual which i liked too. good write.

Spell binding dark poem

Wow that was really good...I wish i read the bok to understnad it a little better but it was still good!
Mandie

This was different. It's actually making me think about it. And not many poems do that, Lol. I really loved the 3rd and 4th stanza the most. They were great. The poem itself was great aswell. You used pretty good rhyming and word choice. I liked it tehe. Awesome job Kaylee. =P 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

P.S. If I don't make it as a songwriter, But you make it as a poet. Remember me =D Lol.

I've heard of that book.

I thought this poem was great.
"Believing the lock's an alarm,"
[locks and alarm?]
Wasn't quite sure. But this poem was really great, writting from a different point of view, I was able to follow along with your writing. So it was some great stuff. A bit spooky, which was cool!

Amazing poem ... Flow was excellent, rhymes felt naturally formed. An enjoyable though sadening write.

Hmm, lots of thoughts in this one it seems packed full of meanings. Some of it panged a few heart strings this side of the computer. A good read, the only fault i can find is that some of the beat is off in parts and "friend" and "understand" dont rhyme too well. But yeh, very good.
Xx

Wow this is really good.

Mesmerizing poem. It had deep feeling and a great flow. It was beautifully written. I liked the repetition of the first stanza.

Kaylee oh my word! What a powerful and deep poem you've written here! That truly was sad...i love poems whose beginning is the end! thats the best! Wonderfully sad poem if that makes sense!
-Krissey

Wonderful. Great flow and use of words.

That was so beautiful. I loved it. Great job
5/5 for sure
Breanna

This is really good, very sad. The first stanza was really good and stuck to me. And I like the way that you also ended the poem in that stanza. The overall poem was really good, had a nice rhythm & flow. Great job on this. You are truly an amazing writer. 5/5**

I'd like to check out that book =)

You seem to have captured the perfect hideaway for a child, and I love the innocense that you portray in the character. The flow was very nice and descriptions were beautiful. Nice poem.

This was good..very deep..good work..i'm glad your friend's book inspired you.

Excellent descriptions and perfect rhymes. thank you for your comment

Wow.
I really love this one.
5/5
It's so perfect I have nothing to nag about...damn
=)
great job
~Emma

Good but not excellent, i like the rhyming but the rhythm is a bit rocky adn why do u have commas at the end of each line? they are unessaceary (cant spell tht!) poetry follows the same punctuation as normal literature. commas should not be used randomly.

-biscuit-