Wonderful poem my dear(haha). I absolutely loved reading it. Its very sad and you put alot into it. I hope you know I'm here whenever you need to talk, I'll gladly listen and be a friend for you.You're an amazing person and poet and you deserve to feel happy. Excellent poem.

Deep. GREAT way of getting your message across. Excellent piece.
5.5

As always~ Kate

Same topic as most poems, but different. More thought put into this one. Short lines but with morepowerful words but with a feeling of desperation from the speaker.

Wow I really enjoyed reading that because I can relate so well. The flow was amazingly good, although the last stanza through me off. I feel like there should be one more line. Maybe you could put "Until the end of time" at the end, I don't know it's just a suggestion.

Try to save me.
Try to help.
Try to talk me out of it.
Try and see what's left.
^^ I loved that stanza, it was my favorite one.

Keep writing!
Cayce

When I read your poems I can really tell you put your heart in to it. great poem.