Great poem and here's the reasons why:

1. Pretty good rhythm, I didn't have much trouble reading this poem out loud at a good pace...which also means

2. No awkward sentence constructions to fit the rhyme, which also means

3. No crappy rhymes, you also stuck to your scheme, which I give you kudos for

4. Nice, realistic details! This is a personalized love poem, the best kind.

I agree a great poem for all the above stated reasons by other people plus i can relate to it alot and it made me smile and yeah it was awesome xxALLYxx

Awwww.. i can SO relate hun.. i am feeling this way right now.. i am so in love with this guy.. but whenever i am around him.. i act like a complete retard.. lol.. this was great.. the emotion was really strong and clear.. it flowed well and your descriptions were good.. just curious.. why is it a risk posting this? 5/5

Good poem-loved all the emotion in it and im sure tonsof people can relate-which is a good thing in a poem! 5/5 keep writing!

Wow! This is a poem I'm sure all can relate to! At least I know I did..why did you take a risk posting this! Nothing was wrong with it..your rhymes were fine and the stucture of it was ok too! I enjoyed this write!
-Krissey

P.S could you read "Some kids dont play?"

I can really realte to this I loved it. I agree with everyone...it was a great poem. Well written, great choice of words, and it flowed perfectly. I loved it, a truly amazing poem.
Great job.
5/5
Breanna

Awww! I can relate as many can. The flow was very good! The rhying was good. I loved the wording. You did a great job on this one! Keep it up!

Cayce x