To be honest I was a bit confused about it at first but rereading it I think what happened was maybe somebody did love someone but didn't want toa admit it at first.
dreams comin true
slowly turning me blue
turning my dreams
into violent screams
[Either something terrible had happened or maybe not the way the speaker had been hoping for. I'm not really sure but these part and the last two sentences in the stanza stood out.]
Maybe describe more of the violent screams or how you feel as the song is almost over.

It was short, And, It could do with a little work to it as Kaylee said.

But I dunno. There was something about this one that I liked. I'm not sure what it is. But I did like it.

..Keep up the good work!

`Taleee. xx.

It was short, but I really liked it! There as so much emotion in it. The rhyming and flow was good.

My last chance
with this last dance
^^Those were my favorite lines!

It was short but had a great style, and a lot of emotion behind it. I liked the whole poem very much and enjoyed reading it. 5/5
it was a pleasure.

Ravyn

Short and to the point, but very powerful indeed

dreams comin true
slowly turning me blue
turning my dreams
into violent screams

flowed perfectly to me. i wouldnt change a thing in this one, I couldnt.

5/5
~*`Bryce Dressler`*~

Very strong poem...I would love to read it again a little bit longer...

This was pretty dang good! I got mixed emotions from it sort of hard to explain.........There really is a lot of emotion coming from it I think it is really good.

This was a pretty good poem, and it reminded me of a poem I wrote a while back. I actually sent something in like this to Mastercard for a commercial. About getting the first kiss on the last dance, it was for prom. hhaha, long story, but good stuff.

It was short but so emotional and powerful. Sometimes it is short two-lined poems or so that make the biggest powerful difference. There was a nice flow to it, and I totally understood what I was reading. Great work! Keep it up! 5/5

Well, i can definitely relate to this alot..that is so sweet, i loved it! You kind of confused me, but it's ok towards the end i knew what you were saying!!! Keep it up 5/5

Aww.. that's so sad. Made me cry cause I can relate to it alot (minus the dancing part) but you did a great job on this. It flowed very well and was easy to read and it was filled with so much emotion. My favorite lines were:
turning my dreams
into violent screams
memories filled with tears
as the song ending nears
Those really stood out to me, Great job on this! 5/5

It was absolutely lovely the rhyme was great made for a easy to read well flowing poem, i loved it another great poem xxALLYxx

Good work. I thought you did a good job. Some of the rhymes feel a bit forced.