Comments : My Wrongful Leader

  • 13 years ago

    by Kaylee

    Yes, this is a poem I can relate to but I'll take that further and tell you why.
    Failing to see the flashing signs
    [Imagery of signs is what I saw while reading this, something I wish were visible when I needed it]
    I followed like a mindless sheep
    [Great metaphor probably meant for a victim of mind games]
    Soon you got tired of me
    [and]
    you found yourself another victim
    [Lines which stood out well.]

  • 13 years ago

    by Cayce

    I loved this poem! I can relate to it so much. I always enjoy poems I can relate to. There was so much emotion expressed in this. The overall flow and rhymong was great. Good job! 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by we_all_live_to_die

    Wow 5/5 great poem i liked it showed alot of emotion good job

  • 13 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    This poem put out a lot of emotion and it was written very well. I say this a bunch but 5/5. Keep on writing, and I'll try to read your other poems as well!

    Ravyn

  • 13 years ago

    by Nelle

    I loved it!!! It was great, not a thing i would change! You really expressed your words well!! Keep it up hun 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Colby

    Hey whats up, great poem, flows nicely. Very sad though...

  • 13 years ago

    by AnnMarie

    Good poem............ The second paragraph or what ever it is called I think that the last line should say '' but you never dried the tears I had cried'', I just think it would ryhme better.

    Please read rose colored glasses and you pick the other two!

  • 13 years ago

    by Natalie

    I tried to smile and be alright
    [I think you should say 'act' instead of 'be'.]
    I begged and pleaded you to stop
    [In this line, it felt like it could use an extra word. I was thinking maybe add 'for' so it says "I begged and pleaded for you to stop"]
    But you turned to me a deaf ear
    [That line just didn't go for me. I thought it might have sounded better with 'turned me to a deaf ear' but that doesn't sound right either.]

    It was a great poem. I really liked it. You've done a good job! 5/5

    `Taleee. xx.

  • 13 years ago

    by Dre4meR

    Great Poem...The love this piece because the words you wrote...even though I have not experience with...I could feel the emotions inside...Very Nice...Good Work

  • 13 years ago

    by *Chels & Britt*

    Man seems like poem after poem I read I can really relate..I wish I could write my feelings out like this seriously..because there is someone I feel the same way about..it was like reading my words!! Wonderfully written poems, you express yourself and get your meaning acorss very well!
    -Chels

  • 13 years ago

    by Poetess Lana

    Wow... this was great. and i can totally relate to it.

    "You found yourself another victim
    And washed away all memories of me
    I'll never forgive myself this time
    For the flashing signs I didn't see"

    That was my fave stanza!

    5/5
    ARP

  • 13 years ago

    by Princess09

    Great poem,different then nething ive ever read on here!! 2nd to last stanza is my fav!!!!

  • 13 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    An honest 5/5!!!! Mind Blowing poem!!! Absolutly MIND BLOWING!!!u write like an angle:):)....&& that is a really good poem:):)

  • 13 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Great beginning! Nice emotions and great flow

  • 13 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    I understand what your poem's about, I know the feeling, you described it perfectly, specially in the end.

    I'll never forgive myself this time
    For the flashing signs I didn't see

    Good job!

    XoXo
    Gaby

  • 13 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    Great poem, full of really strong images and a lot of feelings. well done!!!

    Love
    Jacs
    xxxx

  • 13 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    Great poem, full of really strong images and a lot of feelings. well done!!!

    Love
    Jacs
    xxxx

  • 13 years ago

    by Jasmine

    Wow!

  • 13 years ago

    by lana

    Another great poem written by you

    you are very creative in your poems and it shows that they cum from your heart

    dont stop wrighting them

    another 5/5
    well done