You capture the moments of that night so good if ithis bsed on a true story i know where your coming from! good luck 5/5

Slightly disturbing, deep, emotional poem. It really hit me. Excellent piece, however, definitely a 5/5.

As always~ Kate

This is good poem, it kept my attention, and the descriptions were well written. I liked the way you told what happened, you described the actions, emotions, and thoughts.

Good job! 5/5

XoXo
Gaby

Very good, I loved it, 5/5 keep up the good work!

You already know what i think of this piece.
it was astounding to read.
probably brought some memories which must have touched me
5/5
~Emah

Execellent work. It has great description and has a very strong effect on the reader.