Wonderful, short, and. sweet poem

Well there is a small grammar fault that
"When I first saw you
I'm afraid to get near to you"
should be"when I first saw you i was afraid to get near to you" and thats for all the poem cause u made that mistake in every 2nd sentence after when but over all good poem i like the emotions in it but i give u 4\5 keep on

It's okey..at least i can edit it right..tnx

Good diction and repetions.it created melody and harmony.fine write

Thanks...

I like it. It tells about love from the slow beginning to head over heals

Thank you very much...

Nice.....

Great poem!

When I first saw you
I was afraid to get near to you
When I get near to you
I was afraid to hold you
When I hold you
I was afraid to hug you
When I hug you
I was afraid to kiss you
When I kiss you
I was afraid to fall in love with you
When I fall in love with you
I was afraid to loss you
and baby, I want you to know
I can't live without you....

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Second line.get rid of 'to'
I was afraid to get near you

Third line. Get rid of "to"
When I get near you

Loss= change it to "lose"

Just in my opinion it flows better(:
This poem is true with a great meaning. To afraid to get close because you don't want to lose him. Scared of being to close might make him leave.

Over all great love poem<3
5/5 !

My heart beats for this poem 100/100

Thanks", i really appreciate your comments...

Loved this poem and the flow of it is truly flawless. Feeling of pure love is one of the most amazing feelings in this world.

Greetings

I like the shortness but it is exploading with emotions. Good job.

When I first saw you
I was afraid to get near you
When I get near you
I was afraid to hold you
When I hold you
I was afraid to hug you
When I hug you
I was afraid to kiss you
When I kiss you
I was afraid to fall in love with you
When I fall in love with you
I was afraid to lose you
and baby, I want you to know
I can't live without you....

I won't say anything about the grammar errors. But, I want to emphasize the simplicity of the words and the style. The doubtness and the feelings you wanted to convey. And, Of course the repeatition, this is a perfect example of a good repeatition. Superb. Well done.

Keep on writing.
Simplicity is your style in my opinion.
5 for me