by Mousie Jul 7, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
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I say we never loved each other |
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It's great that as you say you came up with this poem really fast it's just that it kind of shows that you didnt put as much time into it. but thats fine, the poem still expressed all that you wanted it to express...all that and more...Nice write=) |
by Shawna
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This is really sweet!! The best poetry is what just comes out, not when it's forced!! I especially loved the part ' It might not have been truer than true, but it was a love to me!' |
by BrokenMisery
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Firstly good job, but i don't think for one you can be "truer than true". Secondly, you lost your rhyming scheme in your last stanza which threw things off a bit, and thirdly i think you could improve your language, like the lines: |
by gemowski
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This a really good piece of work easy to relate to. im just gettin ova a situation like this. |
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Wow...I'm not really a fan of love poems becasue most of them are well poorly written but this one was amazing...I loved it. |