Praying for Stars (Haiku)

by Joy   Jul 20, 2006


Praying for the stars,
So that I can wish you mine,
Clear 'o night time sky.

(First attempt at Haiku, I dunno, what do you think?)

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  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    For a first attempt this is good. The essence of Haiku is to capture the theme in a short and structured style so you must choose words carefully. I think you achieved this well.
    Try out some more!

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    For your first attempt I thought it was quite good. I've only done one haiku. But I don't think it was as good as this one. I liked your choice of wording too. It was great. Keep it up! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 17 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    Great work on this, usually when people wirte haikus, they mess up the syllable count, but you did it perfectly, i liked your theme and your words were well chosen, great work.

    --Steph

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