Hmm. A very interesting idea, nice rhyming couplet style.

However, there were two stanzas which were questionable to me:

Angel of air, bring me lust,
so i will know who to trust.

This doesn't really make sense... for example, what has air and lust to do with each other? And what has lust and trust to do with each other, other than that they rhyme?

The next stanza's rhyme seems a little forced. If you can't cut it down a little, it's ok.

Overall, a nice poem, a good attempt and an original idea. I do love original ideas.

I loved the angel theme that was quite original. I liked the rhyming couplet format to but as noted above there are a couple of problems with it.

Angel of air, bring me lust,
so i will know who to trust.

I can see the air connection with lust (what does that say about me? lol)
but /I agree it doesn't have much to do with trust.
The next couplet doesn't rhyme and the 2nd line is a bit long.
Other than that it is a cool and original poem.

Very interesting and original poem. The flow was pretty good too except for stanza 3 & 7.

Ohh! i like this.. its good!

I really enjoyed reading this poem - great job!!!!

Hey thanks for all your comments on my poems :)

I reaaally like this poem of yours in particular, especially the line:

"Angel of fear, don't leave me here,
For what in this world should i shed a tear?"

pretty amazing.. keep it up, and stay in touch with me :)
take care xxxxxxxx

Very good i love the angel theme...very kool...keep up the good writing..
*Fallen4Him*

Wow i really liked this poem. it all rhymed and flowed along grate. except in the stanza where you ended with "Everybody" but it was still a great poem

I really loved the rythym and content of this poem it was a original and very good idea good job great poem 5/5

Awww.. this was really good.. the only problem i found was that halfway through the poem you decided to stop rhyming.. other than that.. the descriptions were beautiful, the flow was good, and it was a great idea.. nice job! 5/5

Awwah i liked this poem it wqas really good, and interesting as to how you wrote it!loved the theme, great write 5/5..keep it up..please read and comment on some more of my poems..thanks kirsty palmer xx

Deep, with meaning...nice.

I really love this one especially 'Angel of death, help me shine'
xxx

I was really into the poem until this stanza:
Angel of right, make me see,
Equal opportunities should apply to everybody.

It lost the flow of it all. Dont that it a hard way though the poem wasgreat but you just need to stick with the flow more. Great job though dont stop writing

I thought this was very neat and spiritual.
nicely written

-Kayla

Intresting what u wrote..

i got the feeling you said all, i dont have anything to say no more.. :)

Good.

I loved you this poem a lot really good job.