Comments : The Apocalypse

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow! darien, you are just an amazing poet.. every one of your poems makes my mouth fall.. the descriptions and imagery in this poem were amazing.. they clearly described in detail what you were saying.. i loved how you described each of the different forces, the oceans, lightning, volcanoes, and winds.. the whole effect was very dark and interesting..

    Ripping into pieces, anything in its path
    ^ i think it should be "their" not "its" but i could be wrong

    wonderful work! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Lu

    Darien the imagery this poem portrays is amazing, yet it makes me want to run for cover ....I am such a scardy cat.....lol

    Oh how your poetry has grown the last few months...it is just amazing . You can write about anything under the sun and it turns out to be a brilliant piece.
    If it so be that you chose a career in writing, you shall go far with it Darien .
    Wonderfully written Darien, and deserves nothing less than the highest of praise .

  • 17 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Wow thts really good!!! a 5/5 for me and keep on writing!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Nelle

    Wow! That was amazing..your desprciption was very very powerful..you wrote this amazingly! great job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Bill Turner

    Nicely done. Good to see a dark poem that isn't blood and guts. You used your talent well my friend.

  • 17 years ago

    by Aussie

    Very deep. u got a gr8 image. keep writing:)

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow... that gave me the chills! lol You described everything very well in this and it made it easy for me to picture it in my mind. And you worded it very well. I think the last stanza was my favorite, because of the way you worded it. You did an amazing job on this... even if it did scare me a bit! lol 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by ~DyingBlackRose~

    I like the details..very real. I love this poem..great job! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wow, Darien!

    {HAHA! Have you noticed, in all my comments I always start with "Wow, Darien" Lol..}

    Anywazzles...This was really cool! And great too. But I mean, It's different to most your poems, It's like about..mother nature. Woohoo! Go SMAWCE brother. =P Taha. I'm in a weird mood, I'm sorry. xD

    But mmyup, your flow was great, so was your rhyming, and all of the above. =) Excellent job! 5/5

    Yours sincerly,
    SMAWCE sister. =P

  • 17 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Wow, that was amazing so full of emotion. I don't know if it was supposed to like hatred felt? But I felt like it was. It was amazing. My favorite by far. Wonderful Peice of poetry.

  • 17 years ago

    by Little Dot

    I really liked this poem. The images in it were really haunting. Nicely done. The final line fits in nicely with the rest of the poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bhavin

    Dear darien,

    You bowled me over by your poetry... Its so haunting.. The imagination is so gr8... My hairs stand up when I imagine wat you have written... Keep writing... You are on the right track to make it to the top page...

  • 17 years ago

    by Andy loves Jesus

    Dude wicked poem.. amazing.. great write..!

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Nice poem
    i really like the word choices it is great.
    I also really like the flow of the poem, so perfectly done.
    it is a sad one but so great, keep up the best job, u r a great poet.
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by blueknight

    Woah Great job dude This is a perfect example and the lines are well written the flow the rhyme are little but great The intensity is there the feeling and the focus of the poem

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel

    I got scared imagining it lol. You really do describe things perfectly and are sooooooo talented. 5/5 no doubt about it!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    Great imagery and flow although to me it was more reminiscent of the end of the dinosaurs rather than the infamous apocalypse. Still it was great so guess it's just me then lol.

  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    Very descriptive and well-paced. I felt it was too short or something was lacking, though I can't put a finger on what exactly.

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Beautiful wording and lovely imagery. Very creative topic too. Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    This has some very colorful imagery! The descriptions, the flow, and everything like that was very nicely put. I can also feel a sense of urgency to get this out of your brain and onto the paper. Keep it up!

    Take Care and God Bless,
    Sarah-Joy