I never knew what a 'Lanturne' was before but it was really effective. Well done!

Wow.. i love this idea of a 'lanturn' its very effective, and the words you used were very heartfelt and said so much ! great write.. thanks for the new style :P lol..please rate and comment on my poems, thanks..best wishes Kirsty palmer xx

Very well written, I really enjoyed it.
great job

Awwh, that was beautiful! I loved the words you used, it flowed through well and didn't sound at all awkward.. It was kind of like a sentence.. Nicely done sweetie! 5/5

Love it as the other one...
hmm....might as well try my hands on a "Lanturne" :-)
Keep your head high!!
-singko-

Wow interesting type of poem, i liked it simple but effective nice words, but because there wernt many it was hard to understand the point of it but yeah i still liked it xxALLYxx

There are only three syllables in established.

I have never read apoem like this before, but I really really liked it...It was so simple and yet it said so much in so few words, amazing poem, well done =0)

Muc love Sabrina

This is very interesting style of writtin..i like it and i think the words flowed pretty well eventhough it was really short! 5/5 GREAT JOB~

Cute *5/5*
MandiexXxOx

Well, it encapsulates how your love is strong and is bounded by life....and it does so very elegantly and prettily! well done on this one!
although one suggestion could be that instead of established (wich sounds a little technical) try to come up with a word that is a little more poetic...but i know its hard...matching the syllables and all...lol...well done on the write. you have potential
dhaval...