Comments : When I'm Gone

  • 13 years ago

    by Oscar

    Wow this was a good poem. you might wanna break it down into stanzas but other than that it was exellent. it flowed well and rhymed very good.

  • 13 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Oh a very talented poem, so deep and sad.
    you have done a great job here, I really enjoyed reading it.
    keep it up/5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    OMG that was really deep.

    But this f u c k ing list
    Can go on and on
    And you'll only miss me
    When I'm gone

    these lines really stood out to me.
    It was a great poem. Flowed like silk and loved the format.
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wow, This was really good. Very strong ending aswel. I loved how your lines were so short, gave it so much more depth to it. There's nothing that I'd change, it was great. Keep it up! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 13 years ago

    by awww

    Sad man... i feel the pain and lost in this poem... great job, keep writing!

    ~angel~

  • 13 years ago

    by Rachel

    Wow the ending was sooooooo powerful. The flow was brilliant I don't think there is any way of improving it! Well done! Also if you ever need to talk or anything just msg me because we all have to stcik together k!
    Keep writing don't let that talent go to waste!
    xxx

  • 13 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awww, wow! that was brilliant! the flow worked really well, the descriptions were beautiful yet sad, the emotion was loud and clear.. wow, i loved this! your wording was excellent and i loved how the words seemed to trickle down the page.. wonderful job! 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Sarah Dowlly

    Wow, really enjoyed this poem, i can really relate.

    well done, keep up the good work 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Awhhh. That's sad. I loved reading it though. My favorite lines would have to be.
    "I'll miss the kisses
    I'll miss the fights
    I'll miss your touch
    And the sleepless nights
    I'll miss the pills
    I'll miss your eyes
    I'll miss the knife
    And the butterflies
    But this f u c k ing list
    Can go on and on
    And you'll only miss me
    When I'm gone"

    Loved them it was so emotiona. I give it a five. Keep up the great work Hun.

  • 13 years ago

    by Rena

    This is really depressing but really really good!! i love it!!

    Rena.

  • 13 years ago

    by *~*pureconfusion15*~*

    Wo i just got out of a long term relationship and thats exactly how i feel!!! awsum!!!

  • 13 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Pretty good job. The flow was nice. Your rhymes and vocab was a bit basic.

  • 13 years ago

    by Hayley

    OMG this is EXCELLENT!!! i love everythin about it! you worded it exactly right and i can relate to it. i love the way you ended it.... but you'll only miss me when i'm gone...so true fREAKIN AMAZING!! love reading your poems! keep em coming!
    -hayley

  • 13 years ago

    by Chelsea Loves Him

    I LOVE this poem.. its amazing. and i can relate to it... very well written...keep it up! 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    Good one

  • 13 years ago

    by Angie

    Woowww! Aww this poem was so sad, yet so very very beautiful! I LOVED it! You had a great flow throughout your poem, and the ending was done very well. Nice imagery as well. I especially liked the lines:

    "Crushed me down
    Down below
    So far down
    You'll never know
    And all these tears
    I always cry
    Keep on running
    They'll never dry"

    The S h i t. =P

    5/5

    --Angie xoxo

  • 13 years ago

    by Moose

    I thought it was worth the 5/5. The end was pretty damn powerful n I like the poem all together. Great Job

  • Wow this is so deep
    im left witout words

  • 13 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    Great poem.

  • 13 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    Wow you are such a powerful writer, I loved the emotions you put into this and how short the sentences where. It really kept me hooked on the poem. I have loved reading your poems and is one of my favorites :) 5/5 Take care