Oh my gosh. This was poem was so sad. Hope none of it is based on you though.

As I was reading it, I was just getting dragged in closer and closer. Very intense it was. Loved it. The rhymes were great too, and so was the flow. A really good write. Keep it up! && thanks for you comment. =D

Natalie``

I liked it for the most part. It's good and discriptive. I didn't really follow the storyline that well, but that is my fault, not yours.You are a very good poet. Good work.

I liked it for the most part. It's good and discriptive. I didn't really follow the storyline that well, but that is my fault, not yours.You are a very good poet. Good work.

Good Job!!!!!!! its an excellent poem.

Hey thanks 4 the comment and i will take your advise i know i still have things to work on but thanks and i like your poems
-sam

This made me cry. I'm saving it somewhere. Amazing.
It scared me a bit because I see myself in it. Thankyou for writing this.

OMG! that poem so powerful has brought tears to my eyes, the way in the end it was out of her control. real good poem.

OMG!!!!!! that was SO sad but beautifullly written...i love it so much but i hope it's not based on u or experiences you've had...and if it is than i wish u the best...keep up the good work and keep writing cause ur poems are great!

always
*~*xxBaBi_GrrLxx*~*

That was amazing and i hope none of this is based on real life b/c i no how it feels but great job and keep em comin

OMG! i SERiOUSLY HAVE TEARS iN MY EYES RiGHT NOW;; POEMS DON`T GET MUCH BETTER THAN YOURS! GREAT JOB!

x3-------SHELBY

Omg, me too. I almost cried!!!! Thats really really awesome. You dont get much better then that!!! Keep up the great writing!!! 5/5!!! Luv, Abs!

Wow!This was really well done!You are very good at creating suspense in your writing!Awsome!5/5

Thx 4 the comment! great job on this...i can relate....def keep up the good work
andi

Wow, beautifully written, so much detailed emotion... 5/5

This was a little different than most cutting poems. I suppose it had the story but with added drama and you are left with a mystery within the poem wondering who shot with the sounds that were heard. Awesome write. Take Care, Kay

Wow...oh my gosh ...this is amazing... its full of deep sorrow pain..wow ...the whole time i was reading i had my hand over my mouth like oh my god this is intense ..lol...

the first line drew me in..excellent job...5/5