Wow thats really good I bet it would be hard to learn

Wow taleee.. the more i read your poems, the more impressed i am.. each and every one of them stuns me and leaves me speechless.. they go so deep and you have to read through a couple of times before you can really understand.. wow taleee.. amazing, amazing job hunny! keep it up! 5/5

I really liked this...I agree with them^^^Amazing write. It was so well written, had a good flow, and I loved the emotion youput into it...really you did a great job. I look forward to reading your poetry in the future.
5.5
Breanna

This was really sad and deep. I loved the way each stanza pulled me further into the poem and got darker with each repetition.
Great write once again.

Wow...I loved the repetion. It was such a great touch to the poem. All your poems are so descriptive, which always makes me want to read on and on and on.

P.S. Thanks for the comment...I realy didn't think you was going to comment on my poems cause you seem so famous on here*smiles* so like I thought it would be to much of a hassel...I truly and honestly think you are one of the best poets on this site to the point that I admire your work so much I feel like printing off your poems and putting them all over my room like wallpaper with your signiture and call my rooms theme "Natalie's Wall Of Poems"..but hehe that's a little obsessive. Ok I didn't expect to write this long...Bye

--Shannon--

Yeah a different style greatly written and noce flow the rhyme was well and well presented great job

btw I think we met before lols

Geneross

Ooo! Emotion! Emotion! Lol. I love the emotion! >.< Have i made that clear? Lmao. I love this! It's so good, and I liked the way you repeated the title in it. Great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

As per usual i luv reading ur w0rk. this was a very t0uching piece and i luv the way uve structured ur p0ems. very well written. l0t 0f em0ti0n and p0werful lines. keep it up xx

Another great poem! I've never heard of a Monchielle before but the repetition of the first line worked really well and the flow of the poem was excellent. Well done!! 5/5

Very interesting poem, left me thinking about the motivations.

I think you could improve your diction in this poem a little more, but then the word choice describes everything you need it to without drowning the meaning at all, so maybe that's just personal preference.

I do think you need to change

Wanting some caring friends
to
Needing some caring friends.

This would give a little more desolation and sadness to the ending where emotion is most important.

The choices of rhyme are not forced and additionally they are not all direct rhymes, which is nice.

I also like the style and form you wrote. It is structured neatly and follows the pattern succinctly.

Great job on the whole.

I had to read that twice
but now that I did it makes more sense haha.
It's really good and I actually like the Monchielle style.
good job once
and sorry i have no advice again,
its hard to give advice when none is really needed!

Wow, you already have a lot of comments on here... but that's not going to stop me! this is a really cool poem-style you have here, it totally makes me want to try one. i especially like the first stanza... great unique pairings of words. i think i'll go read more of your poem!

also, thanks so much for your comments on mine : D

Wow, complicated. I liked the mention of "true skin" for some reason that just made a very nice imagine.
Nice, I liked it.

//T.L.//

Dear natalie...
its a real nice poem... it caught my attention till the end... i liked it... u rock pal. take care. bye

Good poem..the flow was good a another 5/5 for me!!

I guess my comments are like copies. But your poetry is original.
5/5
I like the desriptiveness of each poem ive read.
each one seems perfect then you read another and it seems more then perfect.
I cant remember if i already said but your in my favourites.
~emah

I like the way you have used language in this poem! please continure to write! and i will continue to read!!

Very interesting.. ''Times Repeating ..'' That is very true. I liked the emotion. Nicely done.

Again amazing poem..5.5