Well done Nat, this was a very well written poem. Like I've been saying, even though you don't know the proper names of the literary devices, you use them well. OHhh man, that sounds so confusing haha. The last line was an odd one for me. I mean it works well with the title, but I don't see it much as an ending line. I don't know, it could be me!.. lol

Well, this was a great poem, and you are becoming a very good poet. I really wish I started writing when I was younger, I would have matured alot. But I do see my poetry slowly changing. Awesome poem SMAWCE sister!!!..

PS. Thanks so much for today..*hugs*

5/5
I'd love to know ur second person namey thing.
i love your originality in each poem.
So out of the norm.
It's a great change from the usual.

"I'm dying.
I'm crying.
Save me oh please.
I am victim of this tease."

lol soemthing like that.

I love EVERY poem of yours!
~Emah

Wow this was really deep. a great use of words. very powerful and well structured xx

Hey supergirl,
although i dont fully understand your styles of writing there are some that i do (like this one), i like all of those poems alot.

superman

P.S. if you dont want me to call you supergirl just say it and i'll stop

This dark poem is very thought provokin
Anyone who has observed a tortured soul can easily see that it is their own doubts that could isolate them them from the spiritual healing power of forgiveness

EXCELLENT DARK POEM

I think i have read a few of your poems because im sure i have read something like this before so if i have already commented then its ok i will only tell you how good it is again :):) nice work xx

I loved the style of this poem. It was very well written,sad. Great job. Loretta

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Natalie, I never liked the heart icon at the end of your name, anyways.

You get a !!!5!!! becuase poems are instantly better when they're sad poems. Especially on the internet.

right?

Wow Excellent poem girl. I liked the way you you rhymed the last two lines in each stanza, that really put your poem to the next level despite all the descriptive words you used that took it too the top. The flow was faultless and there is nothing negative I can possibly say about this poem. [5/5]

&& thanks for the comment

Hey sweetie! This poem was simply amazing! It was different, i loved how after every stanza you put a single line, in a different perspective. Very interesting. I loved the lines:

"Anxiety bashing in her mind,
Forgetting to stop and breathe,
Clenching fists; holding tight,
Struggling to put up a fight."

Nicely said. You writing sure has changed from before. At least I think so. This poem was great. Keep it up!

5/5's for sure!

--Angie xoxo

Wow, very different and deep poem. As always, you have very visual descriptions, great job.

Aah... Its too good. I dont like writing long comments like an essay but I wanna tell you that a best poet is the one that touches the heart of a reader through her/his poems and you have succeeded in doing so. Bravo!

Wow...You never cease to amaze me. Great, wonderful job. I can't say anything to your poems because they're so wonderful amazing job...

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

This poem is very sad, but produces great images. Nice work with the flow and emotion. It was yet again, another great poem.

I would like to congrates you for winning the weekely contest, you really deserve it as you are the best poet here in the site, great job like always

Wow i loved it.

Wow i really liked this poem. It has depth. Keep writing.
~Kyra~

What?

I m spellbound..

please check my poems too and feel free to comment on it..

God bless!

I love how your poems are put together...5.5
this was very sad, great use of emotions..=]