Comments : The Reflection

  • 13 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Very dramatic, a good pace and flow, a few errors here and there tho, i think the second line should be 'disgusted' not 'discussed' and the last line of that stanza - 'the man who beats me' not 'beets'.

    a long poem but it kept me interested all the way through, it is very moving.

  • 13 years ago

    by Ariana

    There is a spelling error with 'beets,' should be 'beats.'
    Overall I enjoyed this piece, parts of it sounded slightly cliched but the rhythm and rhyme was good and kept up throughout. I particulary liked this stanza:
    'Feel guilty that I ate today
    Of each crumb I feel aware,
    But the dizziness and hunger
    Had become too much to bear.'

    Firstly because the flow was good and also because it was just a subtle hint at an eating disorder and not to overpowering, however still very effective.
    Nice work :)

  • 13 years ago

    by xXxDarkDreamerxXx

    Wow... im left was such a great poem *masterpiece* i cant believe how everything was so....i dont even know how to say it. It made me think alot.. but definetely this was a really really great poem. So many feelings of sorrow, sadness...
    well still it was great keep it up!

  • 13 years ago

    by Tammie

    That was so sad. I like everything about it. The whole poem flowed flawlessly and you did an amazing job of explaining how you feel. A wonderful write, yet again. Keep it up. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by ♥ brokendolly ♥

    You did a great job. Thanks for sharing.

  • 13 years ago

    by ~me~

    Lovley poem
    really sad and ful of emotion !
    at first i thought it was cutting but then it turned out to also abuse, i thought that was really good and sad
    carry on writing !
    love your work
    mex x x x x x