Ohwow. Hun this is amazing. I loved the style of it, it flowed really well. I liked your usage of words, and the idea of the poem. Great Job.

Wow, stunning poem. I felt this poem, it was good and it showed your talent is great. I enjoyed reading the poem and it was a little different to what I usually read so it was even better to read :D

Awh, wow, hunny! That was amazing.. I loved how you had words in parenthesis, it was really effective! It flowed well and the descriptions were excellent.. Nicely done! 5/5

Really great poem, Nat, and I loved how you repeated that one line. The only thing I would suggest is watch your tenses again lol the one in the () are fine but in your second stanza you have overpowering but the other descriptions have -ed for past tense. Keep writing though I love reading.

This looks a lot like a few poems I wrote last year (Reality's Brackets, endangered Species) and one I wrote not so long ago (Twenty Seven).

I think this could have benefitted from an alternating rhyme scheme to boost the already even flow.

The use of parentheses is interesting, though it fails in one aspect that it only describes the line and not the overall feeling of the piece. Would this piece work just as well without them? (Something I asked myself when trying this style.)

The feel is very abstract, so if that was your intention then great job. The first word, vague, describes the poem best and you can take more than a few meanings and descriptions from it.

I would like to ask what your motivation for this was and why you decided to to add the parentheses on the end.

Diction is very interesting if a little disjointed, did you choose the words because of the meaning or because of how they sound?

Overpowering tainted reflection instead of Tainted reflection overpowering would have been a stronger ending to the poem because it flows easier, makes more sense and put the emphasis on the reflection itself, not how overpowering it is.

A good read.

Bret

Yea that was a really great poem and very skillfull. keep it comming.

Great poem girl. I love how you put the words in brackets at the end. That was so different and appealing. Excellent description in this poem too and powerful words.[5/5] Marvelous Job!

I found this really appealing. It was a joy to read, and I love the way the abstract feel to it almost pulls the reader back in. Well done. xx

This is a awesome poem, and it very well written, although short its powerful...loves it..if possible could u read my poem Scars Of Memories Kept please and thank you...xxx bye

Your formating of this poem was very unique and quite cool. Your vocabulary use also added a greater depth to your message as only skilled vocabulary can. The title got me hooked, lol, because it has my name in it. The repitition of the same line at the end of each stanza has a cool finishing and connection effect to the poem. Overall, a nice write.

That is sooo good!!
Loving your work!
Keep up the great work.

Wow this was gud

I woved it. y's evry1 saying hun or has hun in it? newayz. 5/5. though i was slightly confused, still pretty though.

I like the words that is away from the rest at the end of each line. It makes the words sink deeper.

I find this trully gr8. U beat my imagination 10 to 1, good work

The unique format captued my attention.The flow of the poem pulled me closer. The content touched me

This is so amazing poem i like the way u write and the way u use the words great job..the flow was greast so keep it up5/5

Wow, my friend. I have never read anything as good as this. It was awesome, so sad, emotions were strongly shown. perfect!

All i can say about this one is WOW! im speechless 5/5!