Mixed emotions

by eden   Sep 6, 2006


HAVEN'T REALLY FINISHED THIS POEM BUT WHATEVER!!!

the storms rushing in

i can feel the fire against my skin

it's beginning to eat me alive

the only comfort i get is from your eyes

i can feel the tears begin to fall with all the loneliness you feel inside

you don't have to say a word i feel your heart burning within my soul

it's depressing how fast your life is falling apart

days go by and still i wonder why i feel so empty inside

nothing has gone according to plan

today I'm finally breaking down

i can feel it all around

I'm running from myself

I'm running all around.

HEY TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK SHOULD I KEEP WORKING ON THIS POEM OR JUST LEAVE IT THE WAY IT IS???

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  • 17 years ago

    by The Undoing

    I really liked it too. If you wantd to change anything, the only thing I could suggest is more lines, 'cause the rest of them were really good. I liked it alot, good work :).

  • 17 years ago

    by Samantha

    This is really good, I think that you should keep it like it is. :)

    Much love,
    Sammie

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