And if you twist me and turn me
And dance in billows of smoke
((I loved these lines..))

Wow...this poem is amazing. I simply loved it...there are no words for how much I adore it...-is speechless- Wonderful...

xDarkSuicidex5.5

That is freaking amazing...I loved it so much.
I wish I could give you a big meaninful and helpful comment, but honestly, there's nothing I can think to improve on this poem. I think you did a wonderful job,my friend.
*butterfly

You are very talented, you know what you are writing, that is why you are just so great. 5/5

Hey, great poem!
it rhymes really well,
i like your post in the discussion, so i thought i come and comment! Your really funny! lol
Love MEl

This is too good. Really an exellent, cool write. The flow was great and just the rhyming-it was spot on. Loved the imagery which was an intense play with words. Overall this is simply exceptional. I loved the way that it formed images that were vivid. Great write.
~Faith-less

This is a great poem.I love the rhyme scheme and the flow and metaphor and emotion.Very impressive.

Peace, Poetry & Power,

Gary jurechka

This is one of the best poems ive ever read it was absolutely amazing, i love it so much!!!!