The poem was alright, at first interesting and deep in meaning, the flow was great but eventually it felt shaky on and off and occasionally your tenses changed from past to present: You should keep it to one or the other. And the rhymes went from feeling unforced to forced. The charcters started as real people but slowly lost their realism. Still the poem was decent enough.

This poem is well worth the time it takes to read it. I was captivated from the start and amazed by the flow. Also quite mesmerized by the theme Well done

WOW... So deep and full of meaning. Beautiful.

Interesting indeed, It has a good flow which keep me reading..which is quite hard to do on a 'long poem.

Good Work!

Very nice, i like your word choices as well as the flow, it was great,
you have done a great job
5/5 from me.

Wow...when I scrolled to see how long it was I didn't think I would actually read it all but when I started reading I just couldn't stop it had a nice flow and much meaning and was like reading a story...that was a great poem
5/5

Wow, this poem is extremely good. I like how you take things that most people wouldn't really think to write about and turn it into something great! I really enjoyed reading it. =)

x.xBrokenx.x

""I AM A ROCK, like you I cry
Each night I pray wishing to die
Every day this river twists and turns
And my heart it screams; my soul it burns."

~Very powerful perception. Great poem. Strong lesson

Once again very well written

Oh my....sarah, this was absolutely beautiful poem you penned here, though long but worth to read them all...."For life is like a flowing river" - and as life is like a cloud....

have a great day! best wishes from west.....take care, bert ~