You have a somewhat haunting style like a poetic Stephen King.

Wonderfully, beautifully written!

I like it,
you wrote it very well, and I like what it has to say:)

Good job

-Thanks for the c/r
-Josiah

I'll leave a larger comment once I read Part 2

Wow very well written, i like the style

Very nicely done! The only thing I can suggest is to comb through the poem to take out some uneeded words. Keep it up!

Natalie``

This is good. very well written
good job