Nice like it! that is prettty cool.

Truly a unquie style of writing. I loved it, My wifey! 5/5 =]]
Love,
Your Emo Wifey (Heather)

Youve showed great writing ability with this one.though short
it burst into a whole world of ideas.

5/5

Wow for your first time its really good!! i liked it...

That's descriptive in the most disturbing way. I don't know if I should be worried, or applaud you. ??.. uhh, good stuff

Dark.
But very good & makes you think even if the idea may be logic you can find something deeper lol.
Very good and I like how your trying different styles of writing.
Very very good for a first one also[:

Nice job of creating a story within so little words. I'm not much of fan of this style. But good job anyway.

Exellent dark poem. Just as good as mine.

Loved the way you conveyed darkness in the poem. nice 1

Never heard of that type of poem b4 but you did a good job... disturbing but to the bone girl!!

Thats very good... have a read of mine please and vote and leave a comment please jade walters

Wow if u place in some thought it really shows the vileness of the world