You said

This was good, the flow wasn okay and the structure being free style was okay too, I thought this was a little cliche but otherwise was good.
Love
Tara

Um i love free style poetry but i am more into the rhyming ones , they give more intention and reflect more stability to the poem

but anyway the expression was good ,
and it seem from profound feelings

if you dont know yet , love hurt , but in most case we dotn care !!
and yes what hurt the msot is to love somone that dont love you back !
never leave is a fantasy !! unless some realistic things are made from both of you !!

i think you should know that !!

5/5

I do like it, but i do agree with the other comments. the poem does lack some poetic devices, however it is still very good.

You expressed all that you felt except the emtion, it was a little bare, the word choice was simple but not as effective as it could be, the flow was a little off, But I liked what you were trying to say, the first staza has one too many yous in it, you should delete one, and the 4th stanza with out should be one word without. Other than that you did a good job 4/5

Okay, this was cliche -- and it just didn`t work .

You you told me that you loved me,
that you would never hurt me,
and promised you would always be here,
I can't believe I thought you loved me
` The "ee" sound gets annoying after a while . You kept ending sentences with "me" throughout the poem . Along with the phrase "you loved me." It got kind of old and just ruined it .

It just wasn`t great . I can see what you`r saying, and it`s straight out, which I like, but the poem was just ... empty .
..__MiNDYY