Words remain in his heart

Was it the people?
Or the Pain?
The Friendship?
Or the fame?

**Great beginning, wondering, asking what the cause was. And the questions lead the reader to keep reading.**

That fat kid,
Never looked at twice,
One small mistake,
And it lasted his life.

**very true in schools, or anywhere really, i like how you said "one small mistake, and it lasted his life." Another great stanza**

But why did he go?
Where did he run?
Was it cause of the others?
And their twisted fun?

**more questions, leading the reader to want to read more, wondering where he went, im enjoying this poem**

Now things are different,
He has a new start,
But all of their words,
Remain in his heart.

**another true part. kids/teens dont realize that there little bit of fun will last a lifetime to the other person. This poem is awesome to me, because i know exactly where your coming from. great job keep it up!**

How can something that bad be soooooooo good it's sad but you twist it into something good. well you know wat i mean (i hope) anyways you have a tricky way with words it's so awsome luv it and your other poems but instead of commenting all of your poems i decided to make a realy long one well 5/5

**would** lol im kinda tired...

wonderful job on this poem... 5/5

Amazing! Great write. Keep up the good work.

The only thing i owuld change is in the first stanza i would have this:

Was it the people?
Or was it the Pain?
Was it The Friendship?
Or was it the fame?

Wow this poem is sad and you a AWESOME job writing it!!
keep kickin' ass
~jessie~