Another nice poem!
sad sad sad!
you really know how to write!
the poem is filled with sad emotions
and death is never the answer

Yay, i love depressing poems (sorry i just do, they make me realise that there is so much more to life and things could be much worse!)

Death isnt the answer. always here for u hunni. xxxx *hugs*

Wow very deep poem you have here. there's so much emotion in it and so sad. i really like it a lot. you did a wonderful job writing it! 5/5

~Kristina

I love how you aproached this poem what with the demon in it. It made it more interesting. 5/5

A very nice emotional poem, very well written...
keep up the best job
5/5

Beautiful poem. Very sad and heartfelt, I understand where you are coming from. It seems we have the same approach towards things, though I realized, death is never the answer. Keep up the great work! xxx

Wow.... great poem.
Lots of emotions youve put into it! i really hope that your ok, and if not im here to tlk kk?!

definatly a 5/5 from me

~Murder.

Wow. I liked all the emotion in this. Although some of the rhymes were a little cliche, I still liked it. Nice metaphors used. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

This was short, but it was very sad, you did a wonderful job of expressing yourself.

Nice Title, good concept. Vocabulary is simple. Vision was good in the beginning but towards the end I felt that you are drifting away from the concept.

"Endless Battle" is supposed to be endless and the two parties should be equally matched. Why are you leaning towards the solution of death?

The flow is good upto the line "Eating away at me". The next line "They will never stop." sounds very odd and from there on you have lost the flow.

A nice short poem for such a complex concept, but I think you should rewrite the last four lines. And isn't "Ill always be the burden" "I'll always bear the burden" ??

I think that you have just started writing, looking at your profile. WEll keep trying and you will get better.

Awesome poem it was really nice talkin to u 5/5
take care
xoHSxo

Thanx for your comment :)
this was a very dark poem, but very nice written, and way too many people have thoughts like this...you did a great job putting words to the feeling. keepy uppy the good work =)

This poem is short but it keeps to a steady beat which means an excellent flow. I liked your puncutaion usage. The first four lines were the best written since you have the words in and win rhyme (Probably not intentional) but added a kind of chanting effect. The only suggestion is if it's an endless battle don't be so sure you couldn't win : )

Nice job. It almost sounded like lyrics^-^. Do you listen to Linkin Park?

The only thing that could be better is the ending. It was too abrupt

5/5! Amazing write. The flow is on target and your word choice is perfect. This piece has a great emotional depth to it. Maybe its just me but I think that the last line would sound better as just a statement instead of a question. Keep it up---

Really how sad.. I could never get over a thing like that... whoa how sad and heart breaking

Death isn't the answer. :P

For some reason I think this poem would belong more in the Dark section, but it goes well in this section, too.

Anyways, to the poem.. It was short, but the emotions you placed in the piece were intense and raw. & I loved that. I could relate, I've been in that situation before. If this poem was actually based on any true feelings, everything will get better, just give it some time. :]

A great job in my opinion! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Very well done. Deep and emotional. I made a mistake i wanted you to comment Because of you. But im going to comment 2 more of yours for that. Sorry about that. 5/5 by the way.

:)
Taylor

Wow! Strong yet great! Good job on this one! You're a great writer, keep it up! 5/5

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