Aww thats sad but a true and beautiful poem, maybe you could elaborate more on her feelings?

Aww wow great poem you have written. it's really sad, but then happy at the end. the rhyming was really good and it flowed nicely. keep writing! 5/5

~Kristina

I like this one, its short. but i think the way you have expressed the feeling, and emotion within this poem is enough. well written. keep writing, and i will keep reading. xx

Do you mean than on your second stanza? another real good poem room for improvement as ever but still good.

xxx alex xxx