Aww this was really sad :( Ver emotinal write, excellent job 5/5.

~[AnotherDream]~

Wow what a great sad poem this one touched my heart I love how you put those words great Imagination and Nice flow

XD
Geneross

That is really deep, and had a very sad ending. Fake smiles are common, and this is just another story of them. A great one at that. =] 5/5

Aww hunny. You poor thing. You sound like you're going through something that affects you tremendously. If you ever need to talk, I'll be here. =)

The poem..
[and wondering '{why} oh wy does no one like me?']
Correction: Why

[Feeling even if she spoke she wouldn't be heard]
Suggestion: Feeling if she spoke she wouldn't be heard >>It helps the flow out a bit

You did an excellent job. It sounded sort of like a story. I like those kind of poems. They are usually filled with emotion that doesn't appear at first. The flow was a bit off, but that could be fixed with taking out words here and there, or making some of the lines shorter and making the poem longer. Great write. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Aww this is such a different turn on things. Such a sad poem, but it's good that you write of different genres. It really does help explore your writing skills. This poem actually seemed more dark, than sad. It had a lot of imagery, that sort of creeped me out, lol. But anyways, it was a good write.

Awww this is a really sad poem but i think that it was really well written :)

*~*Jen*~*

Wow. Another great poem. I can definately relate to this poem. It's like you have friends, but their all fake. Everything seems fake, and soon you become fake. Smiling just because you have to...it sucks. I've written a couple of poems on this topic as well; haven't posted them up yet, but I think I shall...someday lol.

Anyways, so this poem was beautiful. Full of emotion and nice imagery. Keep it up!

5/5

--Angie xoxo

Wow... This poem was really sad. I hope it wasn't based on true events. :]

Your rhyming was good. I used to always do the aabb scheme, but I decided to try other stuff. Your flow was alright in this, if you wanted to, you could comb through the poem for some unneeded words. But that's up to you.

Keep it up!!

Natalie``

Very very good! Why didn't you rhyme the last stanza? I love the first stanza the best. Everything else is great! great job
5/5

Aww! That is a sad poem! I commend your ability to keep me interested throughout the poem, which a ton of my poems can't even do. As always, i hope that this isn't true, for then the meaning would be even more gut-wrenching. Great write, keep it up!

5/5

Good one ... expresses a lot ... my poem longing dreams ... has the same intetion in its own way except with out the woods part ...