Aw, that was a beautiful poem! Keep up the good work! GBU! Pepa

Beautiful. A nice flow/cadence and idea. Another well done work.

5/5
Luna

Shadowspoet,

Man....... It's jsut simply too long and leieve me if I say it's long everyone else will because I adore poems of decent length. The theme of the poem is just too common among love poems. Your cocnept is very light but you jsut carry it on and on.. with words... and as if that was not enough you have that lengthy note too.

Listen man, I am not downcasting what you feel. I compeltely understand what you would have flet and how much that note means to you.... But it's a fact.

Please punctuate.

Some improvements could have been
as below.

Instead of

long for her to love me
But she loves me in my dreams.

long for her to love me
Only, she loves me in my dreams.

Of what I, myself, must lack.
There was absolutely no need of those two pauses there.

Just try to improve on language and vocabulary. Your structure won't help you much if you do not have the supporting language.

Such a pretty piece of poetry. Seems to me this person will be missing out!!

Well written!! I loved it !

So much emotions on this poem, everyline/stanza held a story to be told.
The ending is perfect.

"At least you know, you dont have to be anybody to be loved by God"

God Bless!

Hey darl very well written poem lot of emotion. very touching piece. keep it up xx

Another wonderful poem. I love the way you write, the words are beautiful; you can feel everything. Always emotional always great. I want to have my writing skills up to your level one day:0)

Wonderful penn, great job!!!

But is the love that I possess
Too wicked for you to see
Why could I not be loved?
For simply being me...

Uhh that hurts my heart to read because thats exactly how I feel about love right now and you've inspired a poem out of me Bert!!
This was so sad because so many people feel like they can't be loved for being themself anymore including me, but your rhymes were amazing and this was such a beautiful poem that came out of you!!!!
Chelsey

P.S your comment on my poem means so much to me..thanks!

Loved for simply being me is a great way to look at it.

WOW I MUST SAY YOU ARE AN EXTREMELY TALENTED WRITER...ONE OF THE BEST IVE EVER SEEN :)

Oh Poet, this is truly amazing!!!!!
i love this part ALOT::
"why could I not be loved?
For simply being me..."

I totally need this in my life, after*sadly* the breakup between me and my bf Yesterday :( :( :(
this is very sweet honey
please keep it up

Best Of Luck
Luv
NemO x0x0x0x0x0x

This is an awesome poem. Very talented. Aimee

OMG simply wonderful poem!!!!everything from the emotion you showed to the flow was perfect. 5/5

A-mazing poem. The flow was really awesome. Stop by and rate my poems sometime.
-peace-

That was simply amazing... i'm in tears.

This is a great poem, keep up the good work!

Your note sounds like a poem as well...and i love the whole thing...its...amazing...

This is really very beautifully written, just loved everything abt it, selection of words is amazing and so is the theme and the way you presented beauty of every word

great write indeed

all the best and take care

Beautiful . This is a masterpiece and I love it .
The choice of words, the emotion . Everything . I am like .. in love with this .
Love it .
..ღ__MiNDYY