Nice song...I could see this really being a song. Jpoet*

Wish u cud add the actual music 2 this! and oerhaps sing it! :P very good either way! :)

Wow, very well written, I'd like to hear this to music. The way you used the words were great, Great Job!!!

Peace, Joe

Well written, a spelling mistake in the 3rd line but other then that it was awesome!!

I got sorta confused with this one. Like I couldn't connect to it. Personally or emotionally. There was really no emotion in this. If you made it longer, it might turn out better. Hope you don't feel offended...just trying to be honest.

The flow was...eek. It was all over the place as well. Some lines were uber long and some were like a couple words. It just didn't work out for me.

Also, if it was me that was writing lyrics, I would write '[Lyrics]' in the poem name. It makes a lot more sense to the reader at first. =) Just some suggestions. 4/5 xoxo

Samantha

Very nice, you are such a talented writer, your every poems are so great. keep up the great job. 5/5

You, holding out your hand
Helping me stand
When I was fading and helpless and weary and worthless

I loved that part, along with the rest also.
Good Rhyming, Good Flow, Good Poem!

Great Job, Emily.

I'm going to give this a 5/5!!!

This is pretty good. I tried to read it with a tune going in my head, and it sort of worked out. :]
Actually, I'm not a master with songs, but it's nice with my limited knowledge.

Very cute poem. I really liked this one(well song)). Lol. Very nice. 5/5
Thanks for the comments!

~*Tay*~

Love it.

Wow great lyrics you have written here. i really like them a lot. you did such a great job. 5/5 keep it up you have talent

~Kristina