I understood it enough, but the emotion and story line just doesn't lead up.

Wow. This poem is really good. I really like it! Great job!

This does not suck. it's really good,and i like it. this remindes me of so many of the poems i've written about suicide. but anyways great job. shanik

Well this poem didn't suck!! i really liked it... and sice u said it was an old poem i figured i would comment on it... greate write though hun

Another great peom u have writen n itz awsome, once again 5/5

Hey, i really dont know why you say there not that good, cause i really dont believe you, again beautifully worded, and moving!
Love Mel

A great poem a always, you have showed your great talent once again, a 5/5 from me.......keep it up

Very sad but ifeel you on that i never psot these kind of poems cause my family occasionally want to see what i write but i ffel u

I thought it would rhyme, and then it didnt, and... thenit did! such a very lovely effect! keep it up.

Not as good as the last one but hey it was still awesome! a few things you can work on in this..well...NOTHING! it was great and amazing! 5/5

Aww, it doesn't suck... you should read my really old ones...

Tweedle Dee
Tweedle Dum
Why aren't we,
Having fun?

Is it because,
we are getting old?
Is it because,
Our sister, we sold?

Maybe its because,
We've sat on our bum?
All I know is, we are
Tweedle Dee and Dum.

...but it doesn't matter we all had to start some where :)

Great Job, I loved your last stanza the best!

5/5

I think you should use the word 'unintentional' on your fourth line, on your 8th I would put 'that I havent met, or neglected to know'
But in all I like it. Very deep. I understand it. I have similar poems. The poems that are most liked are the ones that people can relate to. So good job. Keep up the good work.