Comments : Falling Apart

  • 17 years ago

    by ãêx

    I love it.
    It is EXCELLENT!
    Because it is true...unfortunately.
    I am going to miss her also.
    This poem expresses how we both feel.
    And remember, she'll come back for visits. And...you still have me :). I know It's not the same, but I still love you.

  • 17 years ago

    by xxEvilAngelxx

    Wow! This poem is so deep and there is so much emotion in it! I think that without a rhyme scheme, it expresses the emotion better. I really love this poem. There are a few things you need to fix though--- In the first line it should be: TOO scared - in the second line it should be: and THEN - Also i think you should change the third line to: I just want it to be as PAINLESS as POSSIBLE. - In line 10 I would change it to: That you'll stay - Finally, I think the first letter in EVERY line should be capitalized. Other than those small errors and suggestions, It was incredible!

    xxEvilAngelxx

  • 17 years ago

    by jerald

    I really like ur poem i feel the same way about someone to

  • 17 years ago

    by BehindThisSmilex

    This poem is amazing, it really explains a lot.
    good job.

  • 17 years ago

    by my name is Llama

    Yeh my poem is kinda confusing ey. u kinda have to no wots behind it. ohh thanx for tellin me about the stuff ups. i'll edit it, i h8 it when it does that, lol

  • 17 years ago

    by aimee

    I really like this poem.
    xxxxxx.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tiffani

    Thats a hard feeling to endure. im sorry hun but it will get better i promise.
    i loved reading ur poem, i like how u put "ill fall apart" at the end

    unique write i liked it

    <3

  • 16 years ago

    by That One Girl

    Yea i like this poem too. i love someone but he is moving and i dont know how i will be able to take it. good job

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Great job with this piece. I liked how you used your own structure it was unique and different. The flow was perfect not once did it stumble and your words simple but effective. Really capturing. The meaning behind this was nicely done and I think so many people can relate to this. Well done a 5/5~mel

  • Good work i like your poems