Comments : Law of Karma

  • 16 years ago

    by NoPatience

    This Poem Is SO Tru. Seriously.......... Karma Bites U In The As..s Sometimes. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This is my favourite of yours. I really connected with the emotion expressed here.

    "But alas if I were to show you this today,
    You would take it as a joke and throw it gently away,
    You do not care for my happiness or love at all,
    You seek power in all my life and you are quite likely to fall."

    This stanza was definitely my favourite. Good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kalgalath

    I really liked the ending to that.

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    But alas if I were to show you this today,
    You would take it as a joke and throw it gently away,
    You do not care for my happiness or love at all,
    You seek power in all my life and you are quite likely to fall.

    The law of karma in the world is true,
    What goes up surely will fall,
    And that flying lie is you.

    ^^ I like that. A lot.

    The ending was a bit... uhh.. shaky? I'm not sure, but the ending made up for it, big time.
    I loved it. :) great ending, hun.

    Overall I liked the poem a lot.

    4.7/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Anonymous

    The end made me laugh! Haha, good poem. However, it didn't flow quite well because some of the rhyming was a little off. Other than that, the subject was a good one. 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    Karma-What comes around goes around. People should think twice they never do. Good job. The only thing you might want to look at is your rhyming. It through me off a couple times.

    Keep it up.

    >black&&blue

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem reflects very eloquently a specific example of the law of karma

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem reflects very eloquently a specific example of the law of karma

  • 15 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Ouch.. harsh poem.. but definilty your best becuase the emotion is there and its strong.. the flow is good as well as the rhyme.. the last stanza is weird because its not the same length as the others but its a great ending.. nice job with this one

  • 15 years ago

    by MyDevotion

    Poem is definatly truthful when it comes down to it. i really enjoy how you captivate the reader by sort of telling a story while still sticking to the rules of poetry, excellent read! 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    I really liked the last verse of this poem. it was written with alot of emotion. well done bub

    much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 15 years ago

    by Leona

    This is great... excellent job
    Leona