I would be upset

I think this is an absolutely amazing piece of poetry from the start till the end. it painted a very vivid picture in my mind and the description simply made me gape in wonderment. the wording was absolutely perfect and the rhyme was brilliant. for the last stanza though,

"If I were to die today
I do think I'd be upset
For I just saw my last sunrise and saw my last sunset"
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i think that you should press enter between the word "sunrise" and "and" then it would flow better and not look like a really radom long line.

a very beautiful piece with brilliant description and vivid imagery.

5/5

Keep Writing, lovely
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

Your an awsome poet!! I love it... And dont worry, i want to read your poems, its not so much of a facor.. LoL... && No i can not sing, unfortunatly. K well great poem 5/5 mouah (K)

Wow! That's really deep. Great job. Keep up the awesome work! 5/5

101 peeps viewed 3 people voted!!!!!! ugh i hate the world and it's cruelty 2 me! some day when i conquere the world people will not ask me such foolish questions lyk~"would you lyk cheese on ur taco"!...........................................................stupid people at taco bell!

I really like this poem. I'm not quite sure why, there's just something about it that makes it really neat!

x.xBrokenx.x