I liked how you ended this poem, I think it had great emotion in it. Maybe if you described this poem what she was feeling why she was awaking? was she having nightmares? if so what about. Im sure if u did this it would make the emotion so much stronger. I think you need to make the lines the same length maybe longer then it would flow more evenly throughout this. I do think your poems have potential to be really great though.~mel

I like the flow of this, although it's a bit rough in parts, but it's still a great poem. Great job!

This was a nice poem. This had nice emotion in it. Good ending.