Nature Calls Out Your Name

by XSugarSexSuicideX   Nov 19, 2006


Whispering Trees
The trees speak to me,
Whispering your name, softly,
Oh, how I love it.

Screaming Stream
Triumphant small stream
Trickling between the rocks
Screaming out to us.

Flowered Field
Field full of flowers
Sweet-smelling and romantic
Lay among the bliss

Moon and Stars
Gorgeous moonlit night
As we lay together here
Stars above our heads.

**these are haikus...5-7-5**

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Haikus really take a nack to write. You have done a wonderful job portraying the beauty that a haiku holds.

    I would seperate them more though ... maybe put an ******* between each one to make it easier for the reader to read. At first it seems as though it is one poem that does not go well together; however, when broken up like a haiku should be then it is wonderfully written.

    On the Screaming Stream you have it as a 5-6-5 instead of "Trickling between the rocks" maybe you could write Trickling down between the rocks or even Trickling in between the rocks.

    Just some suggestions. Overall, you did a wonderful job. Keep practicing and writing!

    --Sher

  • 16 years ago

    by Nyx

    Nature is alive and you have that here

  • 17 years ago

    by x.Athame.x

    Oh dear god Rikki. You outdid yourself, thats beautiful. :)

    -Ciar

  • 17 years ago

    by Fruitloop XxProblem ChildxX

    That was beautiful.
    ~kayla-sarah~