OMG THIS POEM IS LIKE SO TOTALLY AWESOME keep up the great work =]

Wow - that makes very powerful reading. the rhyme is fluent and not forced with straight talking language. It is a good write - keep it up.

Thank you for your comments. They are much appreciated!

Jemma

Yea so this is pretty much like one of the greatest poems that I have ever read. No joke. 5/5

That was so excellent. Really great job...definately shows a lot of talent. I really loved it. Keep it up!
~Midnight Sun

Something about this poem makes me feel strange...
But not in a bad way!!!
i love it!
your a very talented writer, and have earneed a place on my faveorites!
kat-x-

Another awsome poem keep it up girl

Wow! You pack a powerful message into this one. The line about him already being dead is very defining. Excellent write!
Charisma*

WOW is all i can say. Your words have really powerful meaning. Awesome job Bonnie xxx

I love the poem, its ver ywell written and i can relate sth in it

Wow! That was really good! I loved the image brought to mind when I read this. Great job! Keep it up!
~Midnight Sun

Wow....that was powerful. you put such feeling into an "unemotional" circumstance, the numbness one can feel when raised to kill. Probably your best poem, keep it up.

Wow, very powerful I loved it keep it up 5/5

Loved the flow of this poem! Your word choice was amazing and liked how you made the stanzas of only 2 lines with this! Well done
5/5~mel

Holy crap!!!!! this is a good poem

hey if you like wrting poems like this u should read my poems (toy soldier, killing machine, and lord of war )

Excellent, 2 thumbs up.

That is such a powerful poem. Brilliant...

Josie

Wow it is very good and riminds me of a movie i saw i like it very well. Have you seen blood diamond. It has is a lot like your poem the child solders were rasied to fight and kill it is very sad but your poem sounded a lot like that I really really liked. plz comment on my poems.

Thanks,Brittany AKA stylinsista07

Omy. WOW! It's really really really good. I can imagine the whole thing. I reallylove this one! Seriously.
Keep writing!!

I love this poem.. it has so much feeling.. keep it up! =)

Beautifully written... just for a change lol like all your poems, it really paints a picture in your mind's eye :) don't stop!!!