Very good poem.

Sad and beautiful

Rachel this is beautiful but so sad! I cried as I read it! Excellent writing!

"Do you taste the tears, running down my face
They've been flowing right towards you, since someone took my place"

Thats so sad... the whole poem was just so heartelt and emotional.
You really portaryed the utter lonliness well,
Excellent
5/5
*Gem*

Thats ralli gud! I luved it! 5/5!!!

Awww! I loved this. Thank you so much for taking time out of your life to leave such great comments on my poetry. I am glad you are honest with your opinions. I loved this poem from the beginning to the very end. Great job! Take care.

Awwww so sad! you are very talented just like cindy.

I really liked it and i understood what you were saying. usually i really dislike poems that rhyme but i liked this one. 5/5

I like the repeativeness, great poem rachel, i give it a 5, keep making them this good!!!!

Aww, this almost brought tears to my eyes, great work. I loved the rhymes and the emotion, and the topic was so broad that most anyone could relate to this piece of work.

Absolutely brilliant.

--Steph

Aww... this is soo sad.. but woah.. written beautifully.. i love how every stanza is like a question.. and wow.. idk i just love this poem.. its my favorite out of all the ones i've read.. ncie job!!

and ilove this line

"Do you even remember, a time when you once cared?"

So much sadness and emotion within your words.
keep writing,
much love, Tara-Kay

Hmm...

I thought a lot of the rhymes seemed to be cliche and overused and stuff. And some of the lines seemed to be too long for others. Don't try to cram everything in into one line. Let the words flow from your head to the pen to the paper.

Although there were minor mistakes, I did rather enjoy the poem. It gave me a lingering sad feeling left when I had finished it. It was also a cliche topic, so that may be it too. But you handled a cliche topic well. Keep writing. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Samantha